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Den engelske stil:

Global Culture

Before I start I will like to say that I tend to use a lot of sarcasm when I write an assignment like this. So don't judge me to hard on that.

First of all, I think there is a lot of advantages. Like international trading and better understanding between different cultures. We are coming closer to each other; the world isn't so big anymore. We can benefit from other countries experiments and science. We can work together to cure a common dangerous disease for example Sars, Cancer and HIV. We can import different kind of materials that don't exist in our own country. Those who can afford it can go to other countries for holiday, and I could go on forever. But I will pass this time. So if you look it that way it is a very good thing that the world has come to be this small.

But, as in everything else there is a "But" and here it is the greedy and wealthy people. They can see how they can use and benefits other people misery. Now not only in there own country, but also little Kwang over in Vietnam. They now can get cheap working capacity. And they practically can hire slaves. And is that a good thing? Who am I to say? They have a job and is now able to put food on the table once a week. And that's good isn't? Before they didn't have anything. Now they have little. And they only have to sacrifices there good health and perhaps there lives. But who cares? Its are in Vietnam, and not here in little Denmark where we all got food everyday and can have a very good life thanks to little Kwang down in Vietnam. So some people earn a good profit out on someone's misery. But that's how the world has become to be. some people are aware of it and some are not. Another example;

the most successful family restaurant in the entire world whose image always appear to that happy smiling clown, who says hallo to the children in the street. They have been accused several times for benefit from small children, age about 7-10 who are working their buts of in a stinking, unhealthy life threatening factory to make a silly little plastic doll. That can come in a HAPPY meal. And I will choose not to say the name of the restaurant, for they are known to prosecute people and make them silence one-way or the other. But they earn millions of dollars each year, and all because of little Kwang. But who cares? Its are all just my opinion, and I only find some of these information on the Internet. And we all now that the Internet is always lying don't we? And what is there good about that? Well, we can say that there isn't so much unemployment over in Vietnam anymore.

What is your experience? Now see that is a good question. Because I don't have any experience like that. The minimum wage doesn't pay me. And I don't have to worry

about my health every time I go to work. And don't ever have to. And I get food every day. In fact I could reach down my bag and pick up an apple if I wanted to. But I'm not hungry right now. And I'm not the holy messiah who have cone to clench the world or anything and I admit that when I was younger that there was nothing better then a HAPPY meal. And could piss myself to death before I got tired of a nice cold bottle of Coca Cola. But my oh my I have changed. I never go and have my self a HAPPY meal anymore, I never drink Coca Cola anymore, and why don't I do that? That's because I have learned to see what lies beyond the facade, what is hiding behind the make up of the silly clown? There lays little kwang dead in the gutter, because of some ones brilliant idea of giving all the little cute children in the eastern countries a job. of course you can't avoid the big companies all the time because they are everywhere, hiding so that you can't see them. And that is terrifying, and all the big companies wont let some smaller new company grow big and perhaps someday become a treat, and now I will come with another example; a company right here I little innocent Denmark was considering to dump Microsoft, and shift to another computer company who was smaller then Microsoft, but much better and a hell of a lot cheaper, but the company soon changed there opinion and that was only because the king and one and only mister Bill Gates come to little Denmark on a business trip, he didn't even have to convince the small Danish company, that they should keep Microsoft, but the mere presence of the king himself made the little Danish company extend there contract with Microsoft for another 10 years. And isn't that what you would call power? But the thing that bugs me the most about that story is, that Microsoft could afford to lose the money from the little Danish company, they wouldn't even notice. But for the other small computer firm it would have guarantied its future.

Perhaps I'm taking this a little to personal and should try to look at it at a more perspective and neutral way. For what does the world really need? Besides and antaBUSH? It needs some one who can make us fat and happy (again I come to think about the HAPPY meal) and even lazier then we already are. Here come the three companies that I have used in this text already in; the happy smiling clown make us fat, Microsoft make us happy (on be cost of others) and Coca Cola make us lazy. we all become one big happy family as these three as our fathers, so lets all join hands and thank them for making the world as it is today.

How do I see the future? Well take a guess. For by now you should now how I feel about the world we live in today. I see the future much like I see today, I see the big companies and them with money control the world and suppress them who doesn't have any money or power. That's how I see the future, but I dearly hope that one-day perhaps not in my lifetime or my children's but one-day we will break free of this vicious circle and end the torments that all the big companies have put on this planet.

but then again if you have to think about it and starts asking questions about that small hope I have, as I do with everything. You would now that the world has to have some big companies to suppress the weak and make money out of the third world. There will always be such people in the world. Unless when the day come that the U.S of A have bombed the entire planet back to the Stone Age.

The most important thing I have learned in this life is that you should always ask questions about everything. And that you always have to see things from another perspective. If I didn't do that I wouldn't be the person I am today, the person who ask all the right questions and the sceptic boy who don't like either clowns or Cola. The person who thinks of little Kwang that now is dead, every time I see a clown. But as I mentioned before, I am no Messiah and will not try to be one, all I have written in this text is true I never go to see the clown I never drink Coca Cola and I try mission impossible every day, and that is to find a way that I can avoid Microsoft, and I won't give up before I am successful. I don't expect you to agree with me on anything of this but only to think of what I have said and to start to ask question about the things that is in your life everyday.